TUTORIAL NOTES 161025
Student group feedback:
– SIMPLE, straightforward contrast between my work and reference
– Laid out very simply and clearly
– My reference has more direct approach versus more subtle approach of family
– Answers the brief directly
– More context, Zack didn’t understand immediately, explain some elements more clearly – the history etc
– More context/depth, for example the stickers need contextualising, make no assumptions in the audience
– Point out difference of spirit between both of the projects, deconstruct spirit for reference, whilst mine is in tension by being softer like a father figure, gentle in nature, hard v soft in texture. “The black doesn’t always have black in it, and the white doesn’t always have white in it”.
– Balance needs to be struck, colonialisms brought good things too!
– Too easy to whitewash?
– More context to legislative angle, parliamentary debate, the curriculum side if I’m going into my kids. Needs to be fairly general, just a couple of examples.
Tutor feedback:
– Target audiences – definite it more, talking about it from an early age. Reference is targeting adults only, I’m looking to target both in my potential output
– What does it mean to talk about these things from an early age? This will make a big difference to the content and tone. Adult preconceptions – you either hate or love by that point, but kids are much more malleable.
(**SIDE NOTE – Tone of kids interview could just be an exploration, don’t lead them, how will that reflect upon MY position as an adult. versus theirs as kids**)
(**DO I NEED TO INTERVIEW KIDS FIRST BEFORE COMPLETING THE AMENDED WRITING – YES**)
– How the kids are taught their point of view
– In my project, I’m doing something that can be shared, reprinted, distributed. Reference is static in that way, specifically the tours. You take the tour, you leave. Its done.
– Ideally make the publication digestible, without assumptions, this piece needs to be neutral or at least true to
– Expand mediums paragraph, more detail please.
– ‘Where are the missing pieces daddy?’ – that’s rich, explained on it once done interview.
– Pride, object to be projected. Is there something to be expanded on here? WHY? The publication will be reproduced hopefully.
(Look over the interview, this looking like the kids book after all)
– This will be a PROJECTION – put in more detail about what, when, how it could be…
– Look over the notes! Difference between autistics for kids and adults?