Tutorial 1 notes 270525
– Group liked the red dot device to follow narrative within latter part, as a storytelling device it worked.
– Liked Mum’s voice, could I add kids voices for their questions?
– Visual jumps between multiple lots of stuff on a page, section 1 and then into reference pages.
– Too many different visual languages?
– Tutor – overall really nice, not sure about overlapping audio point.
2 thoughts about the dot device, this project is about FINDING the message. Is me reading enough? Does it need highlighting? It’s about engaging with the document and finding the sentences. Not a big thing, something to think about.
– Discussion re context of video essay, where we are supposed to show to the work and explain it. Is there a halfway point? Slow down
– Perhaps show someone who hasn’t seen the work?
– More crucial thing to do is to NOT emphasize the content, bit the speed needs looking at. Longer transfers between the page turns, therefore take out to earlier content.
– Could I echo the hidden thing more elsewhere?
– Density of images – could
– Using the passport as a frame is a really strong idea.
– One project a spread o page, free the whole thing up a bit
– Narration is really strong
– Pace of it is good.
– Very sincere script.
– Beginning – make one spread with the passport destruction vid, fill up the page!
– Do something interesting with the references, in stamps or set as page 1 text – same face and colors.
– ESSAY: good feedback, print it in the same passport format. Augment the script from the video. Shoot it. As spreads. Use the typeface in the passport now?
POINTS TO TAKE FORWARD
– Consider red dot, beef up HIDDEN in text.
– Take a step back, look again and see how you can free up the feel to it.
– Record kids voices.
– Look at captions as typeset